My Camp Experience
My opinion on mountain biking it's the best activity on camp. I really like mountain biking because it's fun getting all muddy and it's good exercise.
The bike I got was shiny and fast, but it was better than mine, and I also got an bright orange helmet.
When we were on the ride we came to a massive hill. Korey was in the lead so I was next. When he got the to the bottom and slowing down, Korey fell off and I was just behind him…
The only thing I could do was skid and hope that wouldn't crash into him…
I saved Korey’s life telling everyone to stop so they did not crash into him. Kory was bruised and bleeding but ok.
About twenty minutes after Korys tragedy the group came to another massive hill but this time it was even bigger. The hill dropped straight down, levelled off, turned right and dropped again. I went first then Kory, then all the boys. Then it came to the girls. Paisley went first she had fun, the next was Megan. She was dead scared. We were cheered and chanted “Megan, Megan, Megan” and came down both hills with a lot of confidence, followed by the other girls.
A we bit later we came to a creek. Our instructor told us we needed to clean our bikes because obviously they weren't shiny anymore. So we lined up behind Mason he rode through first the creek followed by Kory then me. I lifted my legs so my feet didn't get wet and rode out of the gate. Everyone did the same then we went back. When we were back at camp, I felt good for Megan when she came down the double hill.
In this piece of writing I have 4 paragraphs all about a different thing.
I think I am going well because there is a really good part that i really like:About twenty minutes after Korys tragedy the group came to another massive hill but this time it was even bigger. The hill dropped straight down, levelled off, turned right and dropped again. I feel that it is really descriptive. My next step is to have a better more descriptive introduction.